First Outdoor Article

There is a Hunting side to IDO.

Would help us help you to put this article into context. What grade of school are you in and where is this article headed to? Teachers desk? Outdoor magazine? Local paper?

Agree. Need to know the audience and the purpose for the article.

You need to break it up into neater and more punchy paragraphs. Currently, it’s long and rambling with each paragraph, it’s easy to forget where you started.

Think of it this way: one thought is one paragraph. Even if that paragraph is only once sentence long.

Grouse

Hey Dylan – looks alot better than my first one did! Unfortunately, I felt like I knew it all even from a young age, so I didn’t support my writing much with facts like you did. That said, I think the factual links and citations here make the article a tougher read. Cite them in a different manner, maybe leading readers to the links in a small bibliography section at bottom. Like Grouse mentioned, every article needs a purpose and an audience with which to direct your focus.

There’s a million styles, and it’s up to you through trial and error to find yours. Mine is more conversational, as it’s comfortable for me to write more like I speak. One thing that really helped me was to read more. The more you digest, the better you get at processing the information, and ultimately re-forming it and finding a way for yourself to spit it back out.

I wish you luck, and thanks for sharing. Keep at it!

Joel

Thanks Joel! Means a lot coming from you.